User talk:Priyanshuuprety/Welfare Queen

Possible edits: Priyanshu

I think discussing about the structural aspect of poverty in the US makes sense, given what was already said about the Reagan during his campaign, but what do you mean by "taking a critical approach to any necessary changes within the US welfare system"? Be more specific here and expand your section.

Noting about the role the Moynihan Report played is a great idea, but where are you planning on inserting this paragraph? I noticed that the sentence starts with "Additionally," but the Moynihan Report precedes Reagan's campaign. Perhaps you might want to start your sentence to clarify the chronology of events; "Prior to Reagan's campaign..."
Since your second paragraph starts with the phrase "several academics have been researching," you might want to add additional sources; this paragraph solely relies on Brush's work.
I think the second sentence in the third paragraph should read "Research has shown that"
You might want to reorganize the second and the third paragraphs so that the order of events becomes clearer (currently, you are going back in time to introduce "suitable home laws").

Hi Priyanshu and Maya! I just finished reviewing your drafts. Great job! ~~Constanza