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Some remarks

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Dear Nevbirer,

As you perhaps remember I was really curious about your text. It does look really promising. But there is still a lot of work to be done...

Some remarks:

Perhaps it is good to mention the most important later editions (e.g. 1968, ed. by Edwards & Joyce; 2013 CUP ← online behind paywall; etc.)

Please find also the OCLC (Worldcat) identifiers for these different versions.

Concerning the second paragraph
"Reasons for travel"

I understand what you mean, but it's not a nice (sub-)title. And as you say in the next paragraph: he was an enthusiastic traveller.
You don't give a source for the quote of …..

Concerning the third paragraph
"Content"

Part of this paragraph could be used in a separate paragraph "Bibliographic information".
I don't understand why you use the quote in the first part of the paragraph.

In general: be more careful with quoting, and giving the sources. I'm curious about these sources.

Last paragraph
"Critics"

Well, it is a promising begin, but now it's time to work it into a good section.

Sorry, there is still a next paragraph
"Notes"

I cannot value the importance of this notes.

Some additional sources you can use:

I hope these remarks are of use for you. Many greetings, --Dick Bos (talk) 17:39, 1 June 2018 (UTC)[reply]