User talk:NKPhillips/sandbox

--Howustii (talk) 03:00, 21 September 2017 (UTC) JOel

1) Under the lead heading consider using English first (Dream Town) as it is Wikipedia protocol and then bring the Haida name "Kung" secondarily in brackets

2) "Kung (or Dream Town)[1] is a village for the Haida people"..... Instead of stating Kung is a village "for the Haida People" you may want to consider rewording it to say something along the lines of

Dream town (or Kung) is a traditional Haida village, located on the.... ...that was abandon in...

3) Although I understand Wikipedia protocol if you seek to accurately represent the Haida Nation, as well as it's beliefs and wishes, you may want to consider rewording the sentence identifying the location of kung to distinguish between Haida Gwaii and British Columbia, Canada (Grey area)

The original sentence says "located on the west side of Alexandra Narrows on Graham Island,[1] the largest and northernmost island of Haida Gwaii (X̱aayda gwaayaay) of British Columbia, Canada"

A more accurate representation from the Haida perspective may state something along the lines of, "the largest and northernmost island of Haida Gwaii (X̱aayda gwaayaay) alongside British Columbia, Canada"

It is kind of confusing but it is a technicality that is still within Wiki guidelines yet simultaneously caters to the Haida perspective. stating the governing body is the "Council of the Haida Nation" but the village is in British Columbia, Canada is kind of contradicting...you may want to consider changing the governing body to "Canada" or the location to "Haida Gwaii alongside British Columbia Canada".

4) If you can find information on it you may want to consider simplifying your lead paragraph and developing an additional paragraph for the name/names where you clarify why/when ‘Nightasis’ became 'Kung"

5) If you are able to find some pictures on the interweb that could add more depth to your page

I think the page you've create is great! I don't think any of my suggestions are essential, but rather a suggestion because I had to make some< JOel