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Missy - you should probably rename the existing article to this more specific, better title, rather than create a new one/duplicate. Rudibatzell (talk)


1. First, what does the article do well? Is there anything from your review that impressed you? Any turn of phrase that described the subject in a clear way?

I like how you used specific dates and figures such as, "more than 400 textile workers awaited an update on their push for a ten hour day."


2. What changes would you suggest the author apply to the article? Why would those changes be an improvement?

You could add more sentences to each section as that would elaborate on detail.


3. What's the most important thing the author could do to improve the article?

Add content to the, "Challenging the Status Quo," subsection.


4. Did you notice anything about the article you reviewed that could be applicable to your own article?

I could add more specific dates to my article like you did.

Temporary Profile (talk) 19:53, 27 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]

1) The layout of your article has a good start and follows logically throughout. Your thoughts on gender norms for the given time frame are intriguing and it leaves me wanting to know more.

2) We spoke in class already about you still searching for more source material and once you find it you will be able to make the sections more robust. I personally do not know anything about this strike and you reference a few times that it challenged the status quo regarding gender. Even without more sources you can probably extend a little more regarding details that may not be the center of your article and event but that give the reader a better picture of the landscape. You could add these things or link to them in another Wiki page if it is there. In your background for example, you could give a little info about data concerning women and children working in the US at this time or in that city. What were the factories or companies that were involved? Was that normal everywhere? or when we talk about the civic leaders on Oct 13th, is there any information that you can find about who was involved. in the middle there is the questioning of gender norms as a little bit of a focal point. Could you elaborate on what those were and how it effected this strike without going to far into it? If you can add detail about the strike i.e. they wanted a 10 hour day without pay cuts. But was that their only grievance? I think during this time textiles was a very dangerous and horrible job to have so assuming I know nothing about it tell me a little about what it was like to add context. It will help you bulk up the sections some too.

3) Must find more sources IF they exist.

4) The citing that you did was different than mine. I barely figured my way out but I would like to look for at yours and add to my arsenal :) Great start and let me know if I can help you search at all for more source material.Jericho2911 (talk) 22:24, 28 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]


1. I really enjoyed the "literal mud slinging" comment, it brings more color to the events of the strike and also informs on methods used by these women and children during this "riot."

2. One suggestion that I would have would be to, if possible, highlight some important people on both sides of this strike. You speak of civic leaders switching their allegiances based on the "amoral" actions of these women, and it leaves me wanting to know who they were? With these older events it is difficult to find things like that, but perhaps even giving more information on Allegheny and the area around the mill would provide you with an easier time in framing these events.

3. The most important thing in my eyes would be to, as is said above, more sources if possible.

4. I like the section that you have before your "contents" box, it is a way to provide contextual information to the background section without bogging down sed section too much. I think I might add that idea in my article! Gloorjf (talk) 03:36, 29 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]