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Hey Mantareina, I hope you have an awesome day (Stack0711 (talk) 16:06, 22 January 2015 (UTC))[reply]

Welcome!

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Welcome!

Hello, Mantareina, and welcome to Wikipedia! I hope you like the place and decide to stay. Here are some pages you might find helpful:

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I work with the Wiki Education Foundation, and help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment. If there's anything I can do to help with your assignment (or, for that matter, any other aspect of Wikipedia) please feel free to drop me a note. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 18:35, 4 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

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When editing articles related about medical-related topics, please bear in mind is that the standards for citations for these is higher than the general standard for sources in Wikipedia articles. Focus more on review articles and less on the latest discoveries. Findings like these are very difficult for a non-expert to put in the proper context without synthesizing a whole body of research literature. While we encourage the use of secondary and tertiary sources in general, this is especially important in medical-related topics. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 18:35, 4 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

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I fixed this (I think). Should be ok now - the info was available to humans but not to bots, I suppose. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 16:44, 23 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Peer Review

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This is a peer review for the "microplastics" wikipedia page you have been editing recently. Overall I have to say fantastic job but there are a few changes I think would improve the article. First of all, there are many words throughout the article that can be given links to their wikipedia pages. For example, in the lead section, adding wikipedia links to words such as cosmetics, ecosystems, UNESCO, etc. would be beneficial. Also in the lead section I would change "secondary microplastics are merely plastic that have been broken down by the environment" to the definition found in the classification section, "secondary microplastics are microscopic plastic fragments derived from the breakdown of larger plastic debris." This defintion is more detailed and accurate. In the classification section, I would change the sentence "In some cases, their use in medicine as vectors for drugs was reported" to something that does not use passive voice like "There have also been reports of microplastics being used in medicine as vectors for drugs." In the sources section, you should change "taking plankton sample" to the plural "taking plankton samples." Lastly, I think it would be better to write meters cubed as "m^3" rather than "m3." Other than that the article looks great! Well done! Itoconnor7 (talk) 20:20, 3 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]


Overall, your article covers a wide range of topics, but it flows well and is very informative. Some sections were a bit vague (I will go into more detail below), but many sections were clear and easy to understand. Good job! These are just some suggestions on how to improve the "Microplastics" wiki article:

INTRODUCTION

The introduction flows well and makes me want to continue reading the article. I suggest linking to the "UNESCO" wiki article so that readers can learn more about its role in the matter of microplastics. The intro should also more closely reflect the contents of the rest of the article, so that reader can get a brief overview of what to expect in the rest of the article. An example would be, “Microplastics can impact the environment through biologically integrating into organisms, acting as a carrier for the dispersal of biota, and effecting buoyancy.”

CLASSIFICATION

Primary Microplastics

I suggest linking to other wiki articles, such as “Air blaster,” “Vector (molecular biology),” and “Scrubber.” This will be more convenient for the reader, if he/she is not too familiar with those terms. It also seems a bit redundant to say that primary microplastics are used in blasting technology twice in the same paragraph.

Secondary microplastics

When you say “a culmination of physical, biological and chemical processes,” try to give a few examples in order to give the reader a clearer understanding. When you say that it is “nanoplastic in size,” you should specify by, for example, providing specific dimensions.

SOURCES

Cosmetic industry

You should link to the wiki articles on “Polyethylene,” “Polyethylene terephthalate,” “Poly(methyl methacrylate),” and “Nylon.”

Clothing

Link to the wiki articles on “Nylon” and “Acrylics.”

Manufactured goods

It would be helpful if you could provide a brief description of what “KIMO Sweden” is, especially since a wikipedia article for it does not exist.

Coastal tourism

You could either link to the wiki article on “Biota (ecology),” which isn’t too informative, or you could briefly explain what it is, just to make sure that the reader knows what you are referring to.

Shipping

I suggest specifying what kinds of plastic waste are being dumped by ships, just to make it clearer how this relates to microplastics.

POTENTIAL IMPACTS ON THE ENVIRONMENT

When talking in particular about four species of sea cucumber, it says that they ingest “between 2- and 20- fold more PVC fragments and between 2- and 138- fold more nylon fragments.” It never goes on to say more than what exactly. When it says that “individuals may be selectively ingesting plastic particles,” you should consider using a word other than "individuals," because that makes it sound like you're referring to humans instead of sea cucumbers. If relevant literature is available, you should elaborate on how and/or why these sea cucumbers are selectively ingesting plastic particles. You include "leaching of plastic component chemicals" as one of the three effects of microplastics on marine organisms after ingestion, but don't really explain it in detail. Providing a brief description of how those chemicals leach in that context would be helpful.

Humans

It would be helpful if you specified what you meant by “some level of plastics in their systems.” Did those studies mention specifically what concentrations were found? It would also be useful to know how “these fibers had become associated with metals, polycholorinated biphenols, and other other toxic contaminants.”

Microplastics as a dispersal of biota

You should go into more detail about how dispersal of biota endangers marine biodiversity. Giving a specific example would also help the reader better grasp what you mean.

Effects on Buoyancy

It would be helpful if you explained what you mean by “fouling." Otherwise, it’s a bit difficult to fully understand how fouling would induce sinking of plastic debris. You should explain how buoyancy can change based on ingestion of microplastics. Also, link to the wiki article on "Autotrophs." Specify what you mean by “larger plastic debris,” in terms of dimensions. Overall, this section needs some more clarification.

PERSISTENT ORGANIC POLLUTANTS

It would be helpful if you elaborated on the differences between microplastics acting as chemical reservoirs on a global scale and on a smaller scale. Giving an example of each would help clarify. Also, not everyone may know what "effluent flumes" are, so a brief description would be helpful. Good job on including a table that is concise and informative. Also, in the table, please make clear in what types of organisms the major health effects have been found in.

Your article is coming along nicely. Keep up the good work! CiKay (talk) 22:29, 3 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]


Wikipedia review notes:

-You may want to acknowledge the third source of microplastics, because it says two and then there are three listed

-May want to hyperlink to some words, such as polypropylene, nylon, adsorption

In the sources section, subsection clothing the final sentence could sound a bit better. Just a thought: Clothing fibers adhere easily to other chemicals , so they can become more toxin laden the longer they exist in the environment.

In sources section, subsection manufactured goods, I realize you are trying to say “meters cubed” but the 3 is not superscripted

-I think when you mention lantern fish, you could just hyperlink to them other than explain what they are in your article space.

Overall, I think this article does a tremendous job of organizing and explaining the topic of microplastics. As you can see, most of my recommendations are just adding hyperlinks, and maybe reorganizing one or two sentences. I didn’t mean to nitpick, but that just shows your article is very well done! For now, I can’t think of any other recommendations.

I apologize for my review being late. I wrote it over a week ago but just left it in an untitled word document rather than posting it. edited by GV1330