User talk:Maddieaalund
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[edit]Hello, Maddieaalund, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Ian and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 18:36, 18 January 2017 (UTC)
- Hi Maddie. Nice to meet you, my name is Ashley.A blaze1928 (talk) 22:20, 19 January 2017 (UTC)
- Hi Maddie! Just wanted to welcome you to the community on Wikipedia. I hope you find editing here enjoyable during your class and that you decide to continue afterwards. ~ Rob13Talk 23:05, 19 January 2017 (UTC)
- Hi Maddie. Nice to meet you, my name is Ashley.A blaze1928 (talk) 22:20, 19 January 2017 (UTC)
Adding a comment to your talk page? DG162704 (talk) 17:49, 20 January 2017 (UTC)
Just practicing the talk page:) Tiffanyizer (talk) 12:47, 8 February 2017 (UTC)
Maddie's Articles to Edit
[edit]"Max Luscher" - https://wiki.riteme.site/wiki/Max_L%C3%BCscher
"Self-Concept" - https://wiki.riteme.site/wiki/Self-concept
"Arousal" - https://wiki.riteme.site/wiki/Arousal
"History of Bipolar Disorder" - https://wiki.riteme.site/wiki/History_of_bipolar_disorder Maddieaalund (talk) 01:17, 10 February 2017 (UTC)
Feedback request
[edit]I fixed the formatting on your addition to the Crystallized self article - section headers should use sentence capitalization, not title capitalization. Beyond that, my advice would be to be more specific. For example, you say "The identity is believed to be..." A statement like that needs to include a "by whom". Beliefs are held, they don't just exist. Similarly, you say "To remedy this, a theory took on a post-structuralist view..." Again - a theory isn't a person, it doesn't have a point of view. Someone modified the theory. Things that like. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 15:34, 16 March 2017 (UTC)
Feedback II
[edit]Nice work on that section. You should use the citation tool in the Visual Editor whenever possible, instead of formatting your references are plain text. You can generate these directly using a DOI or PubMed ID. This not only provides a link to the article, it also makes the reference easier to format and update. I fixed these in your draft. You should also avoid external links in the text; bare URLs like this are subject to link rot and the information can be lost as external URLs are changed. I changed your link to Anthony Barker to a reference, but as a user-created profile, I don't think that Scholarpedia is a good source, and I would encourage you to find a better one.
One small style issue - you generally shouldn't include external links in the article body - instead, include them as references or Avoid situating your comments in time: "...and is still being improved upon to this very day". "To this very day" is rather informal anyway, but it's also very immediate. Since Wikipedia articles don't have publication dates and can develop over the course of many years, statements like that can become very dated.
When you're using abbreviations like the FDA, make sure the term is spelled out fully the first time it is used in the article. And when you're talking about the US, say so. Better yet, give some sense of where else the device has been approved - major regulatory agencies like those in the European Union or Japan warrant mention. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 17:40, 29 March 2017 (UTC)