User talk:Lstitz

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Hello, Lstitz, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Ian and I work with Wiki Education; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.

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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 15:40, 19 January 2021 (UTC)

Mutual Defense Treaty (United States–South Korea)

Please check your edits before saving them (use the "Show preview" button) and do not save edits with large, bright red, error warnings, as you did at Mutual Defense Treaty (United States–South Korea) as can be seen here - Thank you - Arjayay (talk) 14:11, 5 April 2021 (UTC)

Some more feedback

Thanks for making such a substantial addition to the article, but there are some things that you could improve

1. You added a large amount of text from the treaty itself, but you didn't add any commentary or context for this. This would be much better in paragraph form where you provided explanation and context (based on reliable sources) instead of the actual text of the treaty which is challenging for the average person to make sense of. There are also no sources in that table - make sure you add reliable secondary sources for your additions to Wikipedia articles.
2. Remember that section headers are supposed to use sentence should should use sentence capitalization. Only the first work and any proper nouns should be capitalized.
3. The "effects of the treaty" section needs to broken up into paragraphs. A large block of text like that is very hard to read.
4. Avoid "filler" than doesn't add much specific information. For example, you say: The Mutual Defense Treaty between South Korea and the United States had many lasting effects. This tells the reader that there were effects, but it doesn't tell them what they are. Always assume in Wikipedia that most people are going to quite reading after the first sentence or two (of an article or a section) and make sure you give them the best stuff up front. Otherwise they'll learn nothing from the article. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 15:01, 5 April 2021 (UTC)