User talk:Livingdust

Thanks for fixing the references! --Erica

I've posted on my userpage what I think would work as a page for I-TEC, but am holding it here temporarily for suggestions and constructive criticism. Feel free to comment below! Livingdust (talk) 17:32, 2 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Talkback

It's looking great! I think you may be ready to move it back soon. Vicenarian ^{(T · C)} 17:54, 2 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]

May I make a few edits, just some suggestions? Vicenarian ^{(T · C)} 17:56, 2 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Of course! I'd love any suggestions you might have. Livingdust (talk) 17:59, 2 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]

No problem! I just started a major WP:GA review, but when I'm done, I'll give it a good looksee. Vicenarian ^{(T · C)} 18:01, 2 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]

It's excellent, see my edits. The Maverick section still reads a bit like an advert - language like this "the Maverick can safely take off and land in weather conditions that would ground other powered parachutes" should be changed to language like this "the Maverick can take off and land in weather conditions that other powered parachutes would not be able to safely handle." Yeah, wordy, but you see how it makes it more neutral in tone? Also, you mention the "RV-10 Builder-Assist program" in the intro, but not in the article, and don't mention I-Dent or I-See in the lead. But you know, I think you could readily move this out into main article space without worry. Vicenarian ^{(T · C)}

Don't worry! No speedy deletion pending. That advert tag is just to bring attention to the Maverick section. Vicenarian ^{(T · C)} 19:57, 2 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Ok, thanks, just made me panic for a bit there... heh. Livingdust (talk) 19:58, 2 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Ah, and I saw you moved the external links- they make much more sense this way, thanks! Livingdust (talk) 20:01, 2 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Yes, that's generally how they're done according to Wikipedia's MoS. Let's move this sucker out into the main space. Want me to do the honors? Vicenarian ^{(T · C)} 20:07, 2 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I think that would be appropriate. If you wouldn't mind, would you also insert the File:Maverick Flying Car.jpg picture into the Maverick section? I don't have very much experience with the photos... thanks! Livingdust (talk) 20:08, 2 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]

All done! Well, for now. Still more to add and to do, as there always is for any Wikipedia article... but it now belongs in Wikipedia. Congratulations! (You may also remove the redirect from your user page, if you'd like. And put something up there bragging about your great article!) Vicenarian ^{(T · C)} 20:32, 2 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Question, though: The image of the Maverick - it indicates a CC license, but the website it comes from does not indicate it is licensed such. Are you the photographer? We need express permission from the photographer or organization to use the image. Vicenarian ^{(T · C)} 20:42, 2 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I've requested that the original photographer send in permission via email, thanks for the info. Livingdust (talk) 13:55, 11 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]