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Hi Liz. AndFred (talk) 15:31, 16 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Psychology of Language

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Let me know if you have any questions. --Kechambers (talk) 19:52, 16 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Possible Topics

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Speech disorder

Speech error

Language Acquisition

Animal language

Apraxia

Cluttering draft

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This is my draft so far. I have some of the previous article with what I have expanded on. I haven't put my citations in the correct format yet.

Peer Review

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Your organization looks great. The sections are supported by what you write below them.

I think that the additions that you have made are of high quality and relate well to the article. My main suggestions revolve around grammatical changes. I would suggest reading through your article to watch for run on sentences and misuse of commas and colons.

Also, I noticed that the article already has links to other articles so I am assuming that you will leave them, but definitely make links to other wiki articles (ie; ADHD in related disorders section) in case a person who reads this article needs to know what ADHD is.

This is definitely easy to understand. Some of the sections could use a little bit more information (is; explain DAF further in the treatment section, etc.)

Citations look reliable and good neutral viewpoint.

Grammar suggestions:

  • Definition Section: There is currently not a general definition that is accepted by research… REWORD?
  • In cluttered speech, the person’s speech is affected by one or more of the following: (1) failure to maintain normally expected sound, syllable, phrase, and pausing patterns; (2) evidence of greater than expected incidents of disfluency, the majority of which are unlike those typical of people who stutter.
    • Maybe turn this into two sentences before evidence?
  • Characteristics section: “which compromise intelligibility” Is compromise the right word?

Other symptoms include: -lack of awareness of the problem -family history of fluency disorders -confusing, disorganized language or conversational skills -temporary improvement when asked to "slow down" or "pay attention" to speech -misarticulations -poor intelligibility -social or vocational problems -distractibility -hyperactivity -auditory perceptual difficulties -learning disabilities -and apraxia. **Don’t use hyphens in this sentence. Commas?

  • Clutterers OFTEN have reading and writing disorders AS WELL. These additional disorders mainly include sprawling and disorderly handwriting, which poorly integrate ideas and space.

about twenty thoughts explode IN my mind all at once

  • Clutterers often also have reading and writing disorders, especially sprawling, disorderly handwriting, which poorly integrate ideas and space.[4] A clutterer described the feeling associated with a clutter as: It feels like 1) about twenty thoughts explode on my mind all at once, and I need to express them all, 2) that when I'm trying to make a point, that I just remembered something that I was supposed to say, so the person can understand, and I need to interrupt myself to say something that I should have said before, and 3) that I need to constantly revise the sentences that I'm working on, to get it out right
    • When you list things like this, it might be easier to bullet point them or list them one below the other? I think that it may appear better organized and easier to read. Just an idea!
  • Cluttering vs. Stuttering: simultaneously thaN “pure” cluttering

GOOD JOB :) Amf14 (talk) 14:13, 12 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]


Edit suggestions

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Overall nice job on the article. Feel free to add links to other articles throughout your sections. Add a citation section at the end that contains all of your sources. The flow through the topics is very nice.

Definition • The quotation marks are off. You only have one so either deleting it or adding another at the end of the quote would work. • Since you only have two points at the end, don’t list them but rather put them in a regular sentence format.

Characteristics • However… is a really long sentence. Try and chop it up a bit so it flows a little better. • Other symptoms include: -lack… try and put this in sentence form without the colon and do not use – between words, instead use commas. You may also be able to get rid of the quotation marks around slow down and pay attention. I’m not completely sure though.

Cluttering vs stuttering • Maybe give an example of a syntactical since all Wikipedia users might not be familiar with that term. • You repeat yourself by saying that cluttering and stuttering are related but distinct disorders. You say it in the first sentence and then again after your second citation.

Related disorders • This is an extremely short section and because of this, does not fit very well. If you could expand on this and provide more information so that each section is generally similar in length that would be very good. • You may also be able to link to other Wikipedia pages within this section because you mention quite a few other disorders that you should not spend too much time explaining since that is not the purpose of your article. You may be able to say a quick sentence or two about each though and why they are similar to cluttering.

Diagnosis • The first sentence is really awkward and long. Try to make it flow a little better. The way you have it written now sounds like only a speech pathologist can diagnose it but then you say or by a treatment team. So try and find a way that you can say that diagnoses can be made by a speech pathologist on their own or in accordance with a team of other trained professionals including…

Treatment • You say specific closely together in the second and third sentences. Maybe try finding another word or get rid of one. • Should audition and feedback be capitalized as well in the DAF? • You could explain why these treatment options supposedly work. • Try and add a little length to this section as well if it is possible. Expand on whatever you can. Misaacso (talk) 19:38, 12 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

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See also the discussion here. SandyGeorgia (Talk) 17:56, 14 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]

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