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Peer Review

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This is a great addition to the existing material on the webpage. I have a few suggestions that you can incorporate as you revise.

-"at the time" is a bit vague. How about "in the early modern period"? -You may want to site a source directly after this first sentence -Make sure you italicize the title of the work -The second sentence is a bit redundant with the first. Could you integrate the two? -Your sentence about the microscope is a bit awkward, you could rephrase it and combine in with the one after: "One of these inventions was the microscope, which Cavnedish critiques alongside the experimental method itself in the Blazing World." -There are a few dissertations about Cavendish's references to the microscope, which you might want to cite: one of them is "The Whale under the Microscope: Technology and Objectivity in Two Renaissance Utopias" (2008). -Your transition to your final sentence strikes me as a bit awkward. I actually think that you might do better to start with this sentence and then explain how science influenced Cavendish's utopa -Make sure that you put the year, volume and page numbers for Keller's ELH article.