User talk:Kevinwilliams18/sandbox

The sections that you've edited here seem to flow fairly smoothly when reading. However, I was a little confused about the headings that had no information under them (Function, Stimulus, etc.). Are you planning on editing these sections as well, or are they parts of the original article that you don't plan to edit? Other than that, I would suggest reading through what you've written in order to catch any words that may be missing. Doing this would help to make sure that the edited portions make sense. The references that you provided looked really good, as well. Crystalan13 (talk) 16:33, 17 April 2012 (UTC)

I like the topic that you've chosen. I think it's very interesting. I would suggest reading through what you've written for grammar mistakes. The first sentence in the Psychological section should probably be in past tense. I found that it was a little difficult to follow what you'd written in the format that it's in but I'm not sure if you could format this information in a list or bullet points but it would make it easier to read. I think you're making a good contribution to this stub article. Nice sources and nice work. Lindsey.cobb (talk) 13:57, 20 April 2012 (UTC)