User talk:Kate1470!

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I am editing the article [Chet Pancake Article]

The first thing that I would like to add is an imagine of Chet Pancake. On the talk page of the article it was requested, so I think that would be beneficial to the article. Chet Pancake Image
A good image! This page would certainly benefit from that. ZBTfui (talk) 15:22, 25 February 2021 (UTC)

The last thing I wanted to add was, "When she moved to Baltimore in 1994, that is where she found her calling to art. By producing and film making, her work portrayed exclusive subject matters that gained the publics eyes." I wanted to add this to the personal life section of the article because I think this could help let the audience know how she got into film making.

Explaining where she found her passion is going to add a ton to the article, so this is a solid addition! I have a couple recommendations with regard to the structure. "...in 1994, that is where she found her calling to art"

could be shortened to "in 1994, she found her calling to producing and filmmaking". You could then flow into the next sentence effectively by saying "Through her work, she portrayed...". That was just an idea I had, but I definitely recommend playing around with the wording and seeing how you can make the sentences flow better. You also could expand on this some more if you like! Perhaps provide some examples of the "exclusive subject matters" if they are not already provided in the article. This would also give you a chance to add another source, as I believe we are required to have 2. ZBTfui (talk) 15:22, 25 February 2021 (UTC)

Kate1470! (talk) 01:17, 24 February 2021 (UTC) Kate1470! (talk) 03:35, 24 February 2021 (UTC)

@Kate1470!: Hi Grace, Dr. Sarraf here. Great idea to add a photo. Also, I appreciate your addition about Pancake's move to Baltimore and agree with Seth's recommendations for conciseness. KjessJKT (talk) 16:12, 25 February 2021 (UTC)