User talk:Joannnnna/sandbox

Hi! I think that your page is really interesting and informative! I read the original first, and clearly you have done a lot of research. I really like your photos and all your sources seem credible. I would maybe put the section about the crash of 1920 under the history part because I think it might be more effective in adding to the flow and structure of your essay. Maybe you could also add a whole section for accessories because I think that is a significant enough topic. I also think it would be cool to do a section of the modern thoughts around cocktail dresses. Obviously all just suggestions! I think overall you have a really detailed and informative entry, and you do a good job of staying unbiased. Other than just a few small grammar errors and a slight re-structuring of your argument, I really like it!

paigePaigee33 (talk) 16:00, 16 November 2017 (UTC)

Hey!, Overall I think you have a lot of good stuff in your wikipage. I did notice quite a bit of just some grammatical errors which can be fixed with a swift read through. I might also suggest added some more photos, nothing specific but just some different color/style of dresses, perhaps some on modern celebrities if there are any. I think also you could reword your introduction a bit as I think there may not be total neutrality/straight facts. I think that your wall street section is really interesting and could really add a cool aspect to your page if you have any more info on it. I think after some minor editing on just syntax errors this looks good!

--Ben