User talk:Jlrobertson/sandboxDOWD

Jerald, thanks for inviting me to look at this before you post it. You've clearly done a lot of research and spent a lot of time on this. I am truly grateful. I started to work on it but I'm really not supposed to edit my own page because I lack objectivity. I'd suggest you post whatever you're led to post but don't be surprised or hurt if most of this gets trimmed out. My sense is that there's WAY too much Point of View and WAY too much unnecessary detail. I'm sure Hrafn or another experienced wikipedian will give you feedback, one way or another. Thanks again for all your hard work on my behalf, and on behalf of this movement! MBDowd (talk) 19:39, 21 February 2009 (UTC)

Jerald, I just read the latest version of what you've been working on. You have clearly invested an enormous amount of time and energy on this page, for which I am hugely grateful. However, I am also hoping that your time was not spent in vain. Because the article is about me, I'm in no position to comment or edit other than to say that it feels pretty fair to me. But my gut sense is that you would do well to consult Hrafn or another experienced wikipedian to give you feedback. Most wiki pages are much more encyclopedia sounding. IMHO, I think you still have WAY too much Point of View (POV) here. Not mine, necessarily, but others. I'm not quite sure you fully understand the Neutral Point of View concept. I suggest you re-read this page (and, as I said, get coaching from Hrafn or someone else): http://wiki.riteme.site/wiki/NPOV MBDowd (talk) 14:41, 28 February 2009 (UTC)