User talk:Jjlennon/sandbox

Hello, my name is John Lennon. I am currently taking a course in environmental politics and policy at CMU.

Peer Review

Hello John,

I think the article has a very strong beginning. You could add more links and references throughout the piece to flesh out some of the sections. I believe everyone was kind of confused on how far we were supposed to get on the wiki-article. I did't realize how fast this half of the semester has been going. Overall, I think you can add more content and possibly expand to include more sections. I was not totally sure what the overall topic was, but I think this can be fixed when your edit is combined with the full piece. You got me really thinking about the in-text links for the citations.

In class on Tuesday, Stine talked about how last year, the class wrote executive summaries so this year we have to write or make corrections/edits equivalent to a one page executive summary. I still have a bit to do to reach that but you are well on your way. I now see what the overall topic is and my only correction would be just to possible directly cite more of the references you have. You could use multiple sources to back up the larger claims.

-Jack Ronayne