User talk:JerryBlandford

This user is a student editor in Arizona_state_University/HST_304_-_Stalinism_Society_and_Culture_in_the_USSR,_1924-1953_(Spring_B_2018) .

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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 13:34, 16 March 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Gulag

Added the Gulag section. This is part of HST 304 class assignment. As such this edit is currently just a draft. JerryBlandford (talk) 03:23, 7 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]

AnDrea's peer review

Very interesting subject. Is this an edit of an existing article? I'm assuming yes because I do not see a lead section. I like your section breakdown, very clear and easy to follow both topically and chronologically. One thing I did notice is that in your pre-gulag section you go from 1912 to 1918 speaking of the government with no mention of the 1917 revolution and the change of power causing it to seem like it's the same government. One other observation is that every section is titled with some aspect of "forced labor" except the Kolkhoz system. For cohesion it might read better as "Forced Labor in the Kolkhoz System". Good selection of sources although "Stalin and Stalinism" is listed twice as both source 4 and 8. DreaK89 (talk) 21:36, 8 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]

AnDrea, Thanks for the detailed review. We're still working on this and we'll take your suggestions concerning the structure of the titles and fix that. JerryBlandford (talk) 01:45, 13 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]

OShea review

Wow. I think you are off to a great start. The citations are on point, the article is well written and easy to read and follow. The article is balanced and doesnt seem to have a bias on either side. I really think you are on your way to a great article. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Macbookoshea (talk • contribs) 22:15, 8 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Review

Great Job!!!!! Your group is off to a fantastic start. The sections are well thought out, great information, and concise. The article is well balance and neutral, which when I began reading the Gulag's section I was worried it could come off bias, but your group did a great job keeping it neutral and purely factual. Continue the great work!Carr63 (talk) 23:22, 8 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review. We've tried very hard to keep this article consistent chronologically and neutral in contents (not always easy). JerryBlandford (talk) 01:46, 13 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Rowland Review

I really like this draft (though I know it is not done). You are on the right path. I was particular interested in the Soviet Forced Labor section, as I thought that it could probably use some more information, and I think that there is info regarding their own forced labor from the article of Barrier Troops. Something to look into, imprisoning their own over cowardice, retreat, or other factors. RowJay 00:07, 9 April 2018 (UTC) — Preceding unsigned comment added by J.F. Rowland (talk • contribs)

Thank you for the feedback, the Soviet Forced Labor section is the section I am working on, and it is definitely a work in progress. I am really trying to find articles that are specific to labor camps during World War II, but it is proving to be a somewhat difficult task. Trhill (talk) 18:14, 14 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Cohen Review

Excellent draft article. You are far ahead of where I sit with my group, and I will be using a little of your structure as I build my own wiki page. Aside from some small text changes to simplify the language, the only thing I can really suggest is some linking to other Wiki pages on some of the topics (like Gulag, Trotsky, Lenin, and others). Bryancohen1 (talk) 08:03, 9 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Bryan, Excellent idea about linking key terms. We'll make sure to do that. JerryBlandford (talk) 01:47, 13 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Response to Reviews

Thanks for the input everyone! You're right that "Stalin and Stalinism" is listed twice as a source, but they are published by different companies and in different years. So I'm wondering if we should leave it as is? I'm not sure what protocol is. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Ariannemix (talk • contribs) 19:41, 11 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]