User talk:Jeongbean
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[edit]Hello, Jeongbean, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Ian and I work with Wiki Education; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 21:11, 19 September 2023 (UTC)
Peer Review
[edit]Lead: It doesn't seem like a new lead was added? The original lead, however, was very good, so I think this is okay.
Content: Content added is very informative! I enjoyed reading about the history of the Ullmann reaction, as well as how it was developed. I think adding more section headings could be useful: the section added seems like a history section, but the current article does not have a history section.
Tone and Balance: Tone is neutral and not biased towards any side!
Sources and References: Might be good to add a few more references, especially since they're discussing a very chemical topic. I think the history section would benefit a lot from additional references, as well as the explanation of the mechanism! As well, the addition of internal links to other wikipedia pages could be useful.
Images and Media: No images or media is added, but the original page has quite a few images so this is okay!
Overall Impressions: Could be good to title different the sections with subtitles to emphasize separation! For example, Current State can be a subheading of History and Development. As well, adding a diagram of the mechanism could be very helpful rather than just explaining it in words. I think the history context of this reaction is very interesting, and I'm glad it was added! Chmstr (talk) 17:45, 8 November 2023 (UTC)
-PEER REVIEW 2= The introduction is brief and gives good context for the reaction and why it is important. I like how the history section of the article is in bullet points, I find that it breaks up the text nicely. One small detail would be the formatting of the bullet points, they are not quite aligned. The simplified mechanism is really easy to follow, you've inspired me to include something similar in my own article. I would suggest adding another figure for this section to match the text with a visual aid. An arrow pushing mechanism might be worth looking into. Be sure to include where the references you have are used in your writing, and maybe look into more sources that are applicable. Overall, great work so far! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Paoof (talk • contribs) 18:47, 8 November 2023 (UTC)