User talk:JSlater2119
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[edit]Hello, JSlater2119, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Ian and I work with Wiki Education; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 22:02, 2 September 2021 (UTC)
You have an overdue training assignment.
[edit]Please complete the assigned training modules. --TrudiJ (talk) 20:56, 6 September 2021 (UTC)
WCI Peer Review
[edit]The lead is well written and gives a good amount of information about the topic on self without giving away too much information or making it too lengthy. I think the lead provides a good basis for the article by teaching the reader enough about the cartesian self to know the gist of the topic. It is well balanced information and isn't too much too grasp at once.
I do feel like you could add a bit more information into the background section by talking about who Descartes is, how cartesian self came to be known. You have a great display of neutral content and you refrain from adding any personal outlook on the topic. I truly felt like I was learning about Cartesian self in a historical and philosophical way.
Your structure is very clear and your subtopics are presented and formatted well. Starting off with background is the most sensible choice to make since you begin talking about unknown characters and deep philosophical ideologies.
The sources are also well written and displayed. There isn't much you need to change about them but you could put them in alphabetical order if you'd like. 14:16, 28 September 2021 (UTC)
WCI Peer Review 2
[edit]I feel like the lead could do a better job at directly giving the reader the meaning of the Cartesian Self. I know that it is a very complex topic and takes a lot of time to understand; but I feel like for the lead at least there could be a more basic definition for the reader and then dig deeper into the thought later in the article. Other than that, it does a good job at stating what is in the article without giving away too much information.
I think the background section could go more in depth. Descartes writes 6 Mediations which is a lot of information that connects to the "Cartesian Self". You could go more into what he thinks about the self and how he came to these thoughts. You could add more information about the Mediations as a whole to help the reader. Adding more to the background could make the coverage more balanced. The content is very neutral and does not try and push the reader in any direction; you displayed the information in a well put, informative and historical manner.
The sources seem very reliable just possibly putting them in alphabetical order may make it easier for the reader to understand.
Jakewunder16 (talk) 15:46, 28 September 2021 (UTC)
LexBrown07 Peer Review Recieved
[edit]Thank you for your review. I found value in your suggestion that I add to my lead, it confirmed the direction in which I planned to take my article and I am now sure that my lead amongst other things needs more work. Sometimes it's easy to neglect precursors to articles.