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I think it's worth adding external links to your page. Some words where I thought this could be useful:

  • ketone
  • acetoacetate, beta-hydroxybutyrate, acetone
  • macronutrient
  • ketogenic diets
  • ketosis
  • beta-ketothialase
  • Krebs cycle
  • ATP
  • lipolytic (to lipolysis)

Grammatical edits:

  • "Naturally"- do you mean it occurs naturally or is this a comment, because it's not the kind of phrase you would see in an encyclopedia
  • "BHB can be converted to acetoacetic acid; and it is this acetoacetic acid" - make two separate sentences/combine to one
  • Notation of BHB is changed multiple times- the first time you say "beta-hydroxybutyrate", possibly add the other two notations in parentheses for ease of understanding
  • "Produced in the mitochondria of liver cells, acetoacetate is formed by" - re-word to remove comma and make it sound more formal, ex "Acetoaetate is produced in the mitochondria of liver cells by..."
  • "several effects [4]. These effects" - edit to "several effects, ranging from..."
  • "On the other hand"- not a phrase that is usually used in encyclopedias

Content edits:

  • The sentence: " ß-hydroxybutyrate is technically not a ketone due reduced molecule resulting in a hydroxyl group on the first carbon"- maybe this would be more useful if it were near a picture. Alternatively, why is it still classified as a ketone if it's not actually one?
  • "However, more research must be done"- opinion statement, should not be in an encyclopedia article. Maybe say something like "Research on xyz is lacking...""

Opt1cs 16:44, 30 March 2018 (UTC)

Peer Reviiiew

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  • Add blue links!
  • Review the guidelines for chemicals or chemical groups, just in case.
  • I feel like you should have a section on naming conventions, if there are any
  • Populate the "see also" section. I am sure you are already going to do this, but w/e
  • You could probably pare down your word use a little, i.e. "physiological conditions" instead of "regular physiological conditions" etc.

Elcquid (talk) 17:11, 30 March 2018 (UTC)[reply]