User talk:Isolari
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It looks like you are adding some information about environmental justice to this page, which is great! It would be interesting to have a subsection on the different challenges of moving towards renewable sources in different countries. It could also be interesting to look at small-scale renewable energy in developing countries- where energy costs are unaffordable and people rely on things like biodigesters or small solar installations. Like the person above, I wasn't sure what else you edited, but this is a great start! Cjohnsonhall (talk) 00:01, 25 April 2017 (UTC)
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Request reason:
My conduct is not connected in any way with the reason that I've been blocked under. I've been working in Wikipedia as part of a class. I'm currently working in my Sandbox on the article "Fossil Fuels Phase-out" as my Wikiproject. Also, some of my contributions have been under the #FactCheckIt campaign.
Accept reason:
Sorry about that; you were caught in a range block intended for a different user. I've changed the block to not prevent editing by logged in users so that it will no longer affect you. Ks0stm (T•C•G•E) 22:59, 29 April 2017 (UTC)
Isolari (talk) 22:46, 29 April 2017 (UTC)
Thanks
Fossil fuel phase-out
[edit]Hi Isolari
It appears that you have pasted the entire article into your sandbox, so I'm not sure what your proposed additions or removals are. This is one of the reasons why we recommend against doing so. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 21:13, 3 May 2017 (UTC)
- Hi Ian,
I cleared up the sandbox to leave only my editions. However, I don't know how to put in the sandbox that I want to remove certain paragraphs, do you have any advise?
Thanks! Isolari (talk) 02:47, 4 May 2017 (UTC)- Looks good. Some of the sources were just bare URLs, which only give the reader limited information and are difficult to maintain in the long run (because pages get moved around and renamed). So it would be helpful if you could use the Cite tool on the Visual Editor to convert these to properly-formatted references. Thanks. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 14:54, 8 May 2017 (UTC)
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[edit]Hi Isolari. Nice work on your draft. A few things that could be improved
- Your draft introduces a numbered list into the lead section. Lead sections should summarize the main points of the article. They shouldn't include information that isn't already present in the article, and should focus on general, rather than specific information. Lists of specifics shouldn't be in the lead. (See pages 7-9 of the Editing Wikipedia brochure for more details.)
In addition, lists are a poor way to convey information in a setting like this. They are best for contexts where everyone knows what's being discussed, and only needs reminders. - Be specific. You say that Chile has "vast geothermal, solar and wind energy resources..." Vast is a superlative, but it's a rather devalued one.
- The "Policy" section looks good, but I'm concerned about the sourcing. Two of the sources are government documents; these don't really count as independent, third-party sources. I'm also not sure about the third source in this section: "Renewables Now". What reason do you have to consider this a reliable source? I don't see an editorial policy, the "editorial team" link doesn't include the editors or their areas of expertise.
As much as possible, you should be relying on peer reviewed, scholarly sources. A quick search turns up plenty of peer reviewed scholarship on the topic. These should be your major sources. - It's up to you, but I think the graph and the table are a bit redundant. Regardless, in keeping with Wikipedia's style guide, you shouldn't refer to them in the text. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 18:52, 9 October 2017 (UTC)
Thank you so much for your help Ian!
The "Renewables Now" citation and the "vast" statement were in the original article, but I forgot to replace them.
Regarding the government sources, they are the published laws from the Chilean Congress' site. I preferred to read the law and explain it in the article, as there are many nuances that news don't bother to capture. Also, any report that talks about the renewable energy policy in Chile has to refer to these laws.
I'll incorporate your feedback in my draft. Thanks again! Isolari (talk) 21:40, 9 October 2017 (UTC)