User talk:Inspiration 2.0/Esplanade Ave.
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[edit]You've got some good content throughout here, and I like the structure you've created for the article. Remember that ultimately your lead will need to summarize the article, not just describe the physical nature of the street.
Right now, the History section is a bit choppy. You've got some info from a few different sources, but it looks more like notes than a drafted section. Think about how you can stich those different pieces of information together into one or two paragraphs that have a more logical flow.
The other two sections are better with that idea of flow, but in both, you are rushing through. Slow down and provide some more details about the places you reference. Do so more research and bring in some additional information. Each of these sections should be more than one fast-paced paragraph.
Nice work so far! jtodd1973 15:43, 8 March 2021 (UTC)