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@Iheartdata: Nice work on your draft.

  • I would move the second sentence down a bit, so that it comes after the explanation of what "less safe" and "least safe" abortion - focus on the "what" first.
  • I'm not sure that the final sentence of the "Conflating illegal and unsafe abortion" should be there.
  • Ideally, the lead section is supposed to be a summary of what's covered in the body of the article. It would be better to approach the article that, with everything that's in the lead being discussed in more depth in the body of the article, but I realise that would be a lot of work. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 19:31, 12 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
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