User talk:Homedpo/Menstruation
Peer Review Comments
[edit]Hi Divya,
Terrific job on your revisions for the Menstruation article! I have some suggestions that might serve to enhance your writing, but you should know I think this contribution is significant as-it-is and your writing is really commendable.
1. Consider running through this with a comb to clean up grammar, syntax, and enhance general readability.
2. Make sure everything you're claiming is thoroughly defensible through inline citation. And use Chicago style if you can to avoid the sad-looking red text in the references section.
3. Consider being very intentional about what each section contains. For instance, 21st century advocacy almost exclusively discusses Okamoto, leaving out other discussion that might fit in this category.
Overall you did a great job and I look forward to seeing your final wikipedia contribution. Cheers! Rshrid (talk) 03:21, 3 November 2021 (UTC)
Peer Review
[edit]The article is amazing in how well-written it is. Everything flows together really well, and the organization of the present sections is perfect. For changes, the key areas of the page that would most benefit from improvement are the content and images. I feel as though there needs to be a section just on what menstruation is to fully encompass the topic of the article and what it is about. This could be in the lead section or another section. As stated before, all of the other content is very well-written. Also, I think adding images would make the article more visually appealing and create a bigger impact on the audience for certain sections, such as the section on menstrual activism.Ferviani (talk) 03:20, 4 November 2021 (UTC)