User talk:Hmchandler/sandbox

Hey Heather! I think it's a good idea to make a more specific section heading. The rest of it looks good so I think this was a good change. (Cfurey (talk) 06:26, 25 February 2017 (UTC))[reply]

Some good points that you are bringing up. Just try and clean it up so that it isn't just bullet points, but rather a paragraph. Good work. Arsmith24 (talk) 03:22, 5 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Heather! The overall information has great content. However, I feel that the paragraphs are too short in that, there needs to be a bit more backup to the statements made. I think it would be also good to include opposition to consent, rape inside marriage, etc. or to provide examples of opposition to consent, like court cases, etc. Otherwise, it looks great! Spark 96 (talk) 17:27, 10 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Hey! So this is really good information, however, you need to insert the citations into the paragraph itself and not listing them after. Also, to expand on the paragraphs so it is less like bullet points and more like a well thought out paragraph. Other than that I think that the information is unbiased and well written. Cdd18 (talk) 04:47, 12 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]