User talk:Hellotrickster/sandbox

Assessment of Article Draft

Major revisions necessary

You're off to a good start, but before you move your material to mainspace, it is essential that you:

• Expand the prose to 500 words (you currently have less than 150)
• Fix your citations (for instance, both journal entries are missing authors and volume/issue information): make sure that all references include the author, article title, journal/magazine title or publisher, number and volume (if known), and the date published.
• Make clear how your new text will fit into the existing page on Naoko Ogigami. You need to make sure that your sentences are new and different from the text on the already-existing Naoko page, and you need to make clear how your sentences will fit in with the ones that are already there. You can do this by indicating existing text like this: [Here is existing text about Naoko's award-winning film, Megane.] Alternately, you could add your text directly to the existing page, making sure not to duplicate what's already there or erase good existing text.

--110laurent (talk) 23:07, 21 February 2016 (UTC)