User talk:HayRayLee/sandbox
Bipolar II Review
Intro -I like your simplification compared to the jumbled intro the original article had -definitely look out for grammatical errors, especially in the first paragraph
Signs and Symptoms -I like your version of the symptoms better than the original, they look much more professional and are clarified much better -Watch out for spelling errors like “episodes” -The part on Mixed States is interesting. If possible I think you should include more clarification here
Diagnosis -I like the reworked paragraph you offer here, as I think it is more concise and reads better -you might want to consider reworking the last sentence of this paragraph to read more smoothly
History and Future Directions -Lots of grammatical errors in the two paragraphs you added: try to make the sentences less redundant, while also looking for tense errors and missing words -Some terms, like “reverse vegetative symptoms” are not self-explanatory and probably need some additional clarification for the average reader -Things like the DSM-IV might deserve an external link -Otherwise, good work
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