User talk:Hannahnorred/sandbox

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Some popular apps for both student, teacher, and parent use are ClassDojo, and Remind. This accounts for the 72% of iTunes’ top selling education apps are for preschoolers and elementary school students. Some popular apps among students, teachers, and parents include ClassDojo and Remind. This accounts for 72% of iTunes top selling education apps for preschoolers and elementary students.

A pro of messaging apps is their easiness in use and accessibility to student, teachers, and parents. A pro of messaging apps is their ease of use and accessibility to students, teachers, and parents.

Content is neutral, most sentences seem to be connected to reliable sources. Jahkheem (talk) 22:47, 25 October 2018 (UTC)Jahkheem Mosely

Peer Review Section

WE just need to change the tone to make it more "Wiki'ie". I think this will come as we look at more articles and get a better vibe of how these articles are written!

Peer Review

Overall, I think this is a good section to add with useful information. If using another Wikipedia article as a source, you can link the wiki page to the word. For example, in the rough draft section I noticed that the information given about WhatsApp was from a wiki article, so the word "WhatsApp" can be linked to the article so that readers can click on it for more information about that specific app. A couple sources used were not super reliable websites, but I know some topics are very difficult to find information/sources for (my article section is like this). Overall, the tone seemed neutral and unbiased. Below is your first draft section with bolded changes that I made that I believe could possibly improve your section. Make sure to add your sources into the draft. Great job!

"With the rising use of mobile cell phones in school, applications for these cell phones(space between cell phones) have been created in support of this. A variety of messaging apps provide communication for student to student relationships as well as teacher to student. As of February 2018, 80,000 applications were available for teacher use(I think this line fits better here after introducing the ways communication can occur). Some popular(consider removing popular as it sounds more of an essay type of tone, unless this is from a source) apps for both student, teacher, and parent use are ClassDojo, Schoology, and Remind. These account for 72% of iTunes’ top selling education apps for preschoolers and elementary school students. Apps like Remind and ClassDojo offer many different features such as language translation, scheduled reminders, and parent messages." Kstrin8 (talk) 02:44, 29 October 2018 (UTC)

Hillary's Peer Review

Overall, I think the article is very informative. It fits with many of the guidelines given for a solid Wikipedia article. There is no noticeable bias written into the information provided. The links for the citations work well, which is great because it provides easily understandable and identifiable information for the composition of the article. The article itself also doesn't have any plagiarism from the articles. The only suggestion that I would make is that you review your article for grammar and punctuation. There are a few occasions where there is unnecessary comma usage that distracts from the flow of the article, because the comma should not be there. I would also review the draft just to make sure that all of the information provided is organized in a concise and coherent manner. Namely, since you break the information up into a description of the apps used in schools, I would also break up how each app is used at different levels of schooling in the same way. If Whatsapp and Groupme are primarily used in colleges among students, and the others are used in lower grade levels, then I would stick to that trend in the formatting of the article. Overall, I liked your article, and I found it very interesting.