User talk:Gisselle Islas/Marie Louise Bottineau Baldwin

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This is Professor Siegel. I am just testing out writing on the Talk page! You can ignore this message. MLSiegel (talk) 19:17, 3 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]

The article does a good job of chronologically dating major life events in Baldwin's life. The lead section was easy to understand and does a good job of summarizing the main ideas about the article. Also, since the leading section also has a quote it is standing by its self. Perhaps adding an introductory phrase and then ending with the quote would be best to understand who wrote the quote and why it could not have been paraphrased.

In the section about "Native American Advocacy" where the writer includes the following "part in a delegation to President Woodrow Wilson..." reword the sentence to clarity. Also in the same section reword the following sentence: "Baldwin strives to educate and help rid of the 'Squaw drudge'. Rid sounds out of place.

In the section of "Public Persona" delete the space between "her culture preserve..."

Lastly, in the section of "Death and Legacy" reword the sentence "In a Marie...scholarship..."

The article remains unbias and presents the overall chronological events of Baldwin well. (Cmaldonado2000 (talk) 18:00, 9 December 2021 (UTC)cmaldonado2000)[reply]