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Group Feedback from Osquaesitor:

General: -Now that you have had a chance to review other group pages, you can see the benefits of organization. Please read your peer reviews and notice that having a parallel structure (similar organizational schemes) for all of your sections will not only help others review your work, but it will also allow you to better organize and draft material that you will then make final. Specifically, it is difficult to know who is doing what work, on what pages (see below) or sections of pages. -Add the links to the pages that are good candiates for you to edit. Remember that these may not always be the specific page for your animal. -This is a draft of content to be uploaded to Wikipedia. Therefore, critical key-words or terms that require defition should be linked to the pages related to the topic or that define a word. -It appears as though there continues to be some confusion as to when you can use images or not. Complete or go back to the student training and you can also go here for a very comprehensive how-to and resources on contributing to Wikimedia. https://commons.wikimedia.org/wiki/Help:Contents


Specific section comments:

EGGS: You do not need to acquire the exact image to make it useful. If there are creative commons images, then maybe you can use them. However, do a thorough search that other pages are not already covering the content you want to contribute. SWIM BLADDER: Image plans? What page do you want to edit? ANATOMY: Be more specific. If you plan to focus on find, then say so. Will it be bones, muscles, both? What pages do you want to edit? How are their fins unique to other fish fins?

Osquaesitor (talk) 21:57, 1 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]


PEER REVIEWS: Overall there is good supporting material for the Gar wiki page. There is an extension on points already discussed in the main article which will develop the piece more.

Toxicity: Instead of saying what you would like/plan on doing, make the piece more into a draft that you would publish onto the Wiki page so that you can receive feedback which could improve the overall structure and grammar of your piece as well as feedback on the facts. Also use direct links to other Wiki pages so that people could view those pages as well. Also there are no citations in this piece besides the photo.

Swim Bladder: I think this is a great addition to the original piece. The reading is a little wordy which made me have to read the sentence twice in order to cut out some unneeded words. Also add in direct links to other wiki pages such as swim bladder so that readers can go read that Wiki page to receive more information. Your sources used are very helpful!

Anatomy: More details could be added such as the advantages of these appendages, are they similar to other fish? You could go into much more detail about the function of the fins. The photo would be a really good idea especially if you were able to point to the specific parts.

Distribution: This section was very simple and to the point on where to find gar’s today and this will add to the overall article very well. Bucl003 (talk) 00:18, 22 March 2018 (UTC)[reply]


Toxicity: Sources defining the mechanism behind why some are toxic and some are nontoxic? Swim Bladder: Sentence two: specify that "they" means the fish itself. Additionally, how is aerial breathing rate significant? The next sentence could be better tied into the second if specified that aerial breathing is crucial for hypoxic aquatic environments. Anatomy: Establish the importance/significance of having paired appendages. More information and more sources about the intricacies of gar specifically. Distribution: Concise while outlining general geographic range. Good idea of creating an original image to then be uploaded! Overall, good range of information to be added. More sources and information could help bring more to the article(s), but what is already addressed looks to be good additions. Apairofwoolsocks (talk) 00:49, 23 March 2018 (UTC)[reply]


Swim Bladder: "seems to affect" is maybe too conversational? Perhaps try "research suggests water temperature affects the gar..." or maybe just cut straight to "rising water temperature increases aerial breathing rate". Also, make sure to examine how this actually affects the uses of the swim bladder in the gar, or if it affects the swim bladder as an adaptation for living in deoxygenated water. Your current section suggests this, but it is unclear if you mean for that connection to be made. Be explicit! Anatomy: Why edit a free domain photo, when you could include a photo of your gar? Is the photo you found a drawing which shows them more clearly? Just something to think about. Also, this is super basic information, and you should probably go a little more in depth. I suppose you are intending to work with the "swim bladder" section to add to anatomy, but be sure to go deeper. Do different types of gar have different distinct kinds of fins? Does the kind of fin they have affect movement? Distribution: This is interesting enough, though shallow. Do gars live in certain types of environments? What are "temperate waters surrounding the equator"? Does this require particular climatic occurrences which would dictate gar range? Are we looking at the same species across all these locations? Different species? Do they have adaptations which allow them to live in different locations or are the locations similar enough to only have different species by allopatric speciation? Feel free to go a little in depth on this topic, perhaps? EvenBadScientistsCanObserve (talk) 06:07, 23 March 2018 (UTC)[reply]


Gar

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Derek Fish's Copyedit

Week 6: Proposed Image additions and Assigning Paragraphs (3-16-18)

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I would like to add information and images to the Gar page reguarding the toxicity of Gar Roe. The information should be added to each of the Gar species pages because some of the species have toxic eggs, and the other species have eggs that can be prepared to be eaten safely. I have been unable to find images that show Gar eggs, but I would like to figure out which chemical in the eggs causes the toxicity in some species, take pictures of Gar eggs during the dissection if our group is lucky enough to get a female, and add all of that information to the relative wiki pages. There are several picture of Pike Roe available on Creative Commons, and all of them are being used as food.[1]

This an an intriguing topic, I'd like to see some information on it and details. Also think about what you want to do if you end up dissecting a male, what other images might contribute to your article? Start drafting and see where it leads you, it might also help you figure out images you may want to use.

Morphology, Physiology, and Anatomy of the Gar: Jac1702

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Swim Bladder

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The gar's swim bladder has been extensively studied to find the mechanics of this organ, as it is used multi-purposely within the fish. Such research has shown that the temperature of the water seems to affect the gar, as they will increase the aerial breathing rate as temperature of the water is raised. Gars can live completely submerged in oxygenated water and remain healthy while also being able to survive in deoxygenated water if allowed access to air[1]. This adaptation can be the result of environmental pressures and behavioral factors[2].

This is a good start about the swim bladder. I think rather than having the beginning as you do (Narrative in nature), begin discussing general uses of a swim bladder and cite, then dive into the specifics of how the Gar uses it's swim bladder. How do you want to integrate an image? Are you planning to add an image from your own dissection, or grab an image from another source? Do you want to annotate the image with arrows? Just things to think about, but great start!

Anatomy

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The gar has paired appendages, including pectoral fins, pelvic fins, while also having an anal fin, caudal fin, and a dorsal fin[3]. I want to add a picture with these terms pointing to the correct anatomical fins on the fish. I found a free domain picture that I will edit to create arrows with corresponding fin name. (Additions as made by Doctor Velvet)

Maybe discuss the advantages of having this specific type of anatomy (such as paired appendages). Or, maybe compare this anatomy setup with relatives of the gar and compare how they use them. I like the idea of using a free picture and annotating, that will help tie together the information to the reader. Have you thought about taking your own pictures of the specimen prior to dissecting? This might allow you to get the exact picture you want rather than settling with what is on the free domain.

I've noticed that under the distribution section, there is only information on the distribution of fossilized gar; there is nothing that points out the distribution of gars of today's day and age. My research this week will focus primarily on the modern Gar and its distribution.

  1. The Gar can be found primarily on the coasts of the European and African Continents, as far North as the United Kingdom and as far South as Senegal; it can also be found in the temperate waters surrounding the equator in the Mediterranean Sea[4]. In America, its distribution lies mainly in the coastal waters off of Texas and Louisiana, and off the eastern coast of Mexico.[5]
    • I would like to add the images found the above-two sites, but I am unsure if that is allowed due to copyrights; if the material is copyrighted, I would love to edit an image with Photoshop or something that effectively displays that distribution!

I like where this is going. The only concern I have here is the first cite. Is this a good citation with trustworthy information? Is there an educational institution or book with the same information that might be better? Just something to think about.

Overall the entire group did a pretty good job. Just keep thinking about how you want to formulate a final product, and start thinking about how you dissection may play into the information (or pictures) you could display.

  1. Bibliography
    1. (see 4 and 5 above)
  1. ^ Renfro, Larry; Hill, Loren (1970). "Factors Influencing the Aerial Breathing and Metabolism of Gars (Lepisosteus)" (PDF). The Southwestern Naturalist. 15 (1): 45-54.
  2. ^ Hill, Loren (1972). "Social Aspects of Aerial Respiration of Young Gars (Lepisosteus)" (PDF). The Southwestern Naturalist. 16 (3): 239-247.
  3. ^ Becker, George (1983). "Fishes of Wisconsin" (PDF): 239-248. {{cite journal}}: Cite journal requires |journal= (help)
  4. ^ "Garfish | Britishseafishing.co.uk". britishseafishing.co.uk. Retrieved 2018-03-17.
  5. ^ "Alligator Gar - Range Map". www.fws.gov. Retrieved 2018-03-17.

Peer Review

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Since swim bladder has been extensively studied how would you add more to contribute it? Also, I am not quite sure on who is doing what part for the team members. For the Gar Roe I think it would be great if you can get some roe! (I hope your Gar will have some!) I think the anatomy portion is set and have a solid plan on what to add. NyQuildrops (talk) 03:25, 24 March 2018 (UTC)[reply]