User talk:Funinfundus/sandbox

Hi Funinfundus, here are some thoughts about your sandbox:

Watch technical language and try to keep your audience in mind (someone with a high school reading level). If you can use simpler terms, do so, and if jargon is unavoidable, put a short definition in parentheses after the term. The terms that caught by eye here were "nulliparous" and "parous". These can be simplified.
I would change "In such cases, NSAIDs are effective" to "In such cases, NSAIDs (such as ibuprofen) are effective." An average high schooler might not know what an NSAID is, but they probably know what ibuprofen is.
Wikipedia has its own manual of style for article consistency. One point in the manual style is that section titles are in sentence case, not title case. This means that only the first word and any proper nouns of a title are capitalized. So "Insertion Timing" becomes "Insertion timing", for example
Consider adding more links! I like to have at least one link per paragraph (and sometimes as many as one per sentence!)
When citing multiple sources, there are no spaces between the consecutive footnotes. This is done correctly in your last sentence of "Insertion timing" but incorrectly after the sentence "After cesarean deliveries, the IUD is placed in the uterus with forceps or manually during surgery prior to suturing the uterine incision".
I think you should either retitle "Insertion procedure" to "Insertion and removal procedure" or remove the content about IUD removal
Most of your sources look really good and compliant with Wikipedia rules about sourcing medical content. However, I think you should find a replacement source for the self.com reference [1]. Every other source looks great, though.

That's all I have for you for now! Let me know if you have questions about any of this feedback. Thanks, Elysia (Wiki Ed) (talk) 20:50, 14 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]