User talk:Freemjd
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 16:27, 2 October 2018 (UTC)
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[edit]The lead sentences are good and structurally sound. However, the first paragraph of the History section is weirdly arranged. It needs to be reorganized to be in chronological order. You should also delete the unnecessary commentary, like the parts about Redban befriending the comedians. It's pretty much implied that they're friends.
The rest of the information is pretty solid. I think it just needs some more information. Specifically, I wish there would be more information of Redban's leaving the producer role, and Jamie Venom's contributions he has made.
I think adding the criticism/controversy section is a good idea. He's a comedian, so there's bound to be some some criticism on his comedy. I also believe adding a list of notable topics/famous episodes, as well as list of notable guests will help me understand the popularity and legitimacy of the podcast. Right now there are only a few guests and episodes listed and it's difficult to keep track of.
The sponsorship of Fleshlight seems random to me. I think it should be elaborated on more, and potentially adding other notable or interesting sponsors will make that section more whole and factual.
There seems to be a lack of outside sources that credit and affirm the notability of this podcast. I feel like without these other sources, it won't be as respectable of an article. Possibly showing the podcast's ranking on top charts for podcasts could help the reader visualize it--Colli3jp (talk) 18:07, 29 October 2018 (UTC) more. Colli3jp (talk) 18:07, 29 October 2018 (UTC)