User talk:FiuHonors2016/sandbox

Week 2

Nicely done for this week. My only suggestion is that you write in complete sentences and that you present your arguments more thoroughly when you are critiquing an article. Your writing on the Reacting games page was okay, but it was not very helpful. Think about how people from around the world will be reading your answers. Do not be mediocre. Alfgarciamora (talk) 21:19, 30 January 2017 (UTC)

Ok! Thank you, for your advice. I will try to do so in the future. @Alfgarciamora: ThienHuynhFIU (talk) 22:08, 30 January 2017 (UTC)

Week 5

@ThienHuynhFIU: AMAZING job for this week, Thien! Keep up the tremendous work! Alfgarciamora (talk) 13:55, 21 February 2017 (UTC)

Week 6 Peer-Review

Hey, so what you have on your article right now was incredibly descriptive and well formulated. I only added one or two commas here and there so structurally and grammatically, your article right now is very sound. The only thing I would consider looking into is on the first paragraph, in the first couple of sentences, you mention how he was baptized but "was crushed when the King prohibited Protestants from getting involved in much of the public life". It was a bit confusing since he was technically baptized as a Jesuit. Was it because his parents were Protestant or he believed in the Protestant faith as a young boy? That's the only section I would consider rewording or adding more information to so it is not as confusing. Also, it might be best to place a brief outline in your sandbox of what else you want to add to the article, just bullet points of each section you want to add or subtract from so others know what you plan to work on. Other than that though your article is really good, congrats!--IsaMMontes (talk) 04:20, 27 February 2017 (UTC)

Thank you for the input, Isabella. I will work on correcting the wording so that it becomes more explicit, and I will also add an outline. @IsaMMontes:. ThienHuynhFIU (talk) 23:43, 28 February 2017 (UTC)

Week 8

You have done an EXCEPTIONAL job, ThienHuynhFIU!! Congratulations! I loved that you were able to insert sentences here and there in order to round out your page and provide more detailed accounts on your person. You have done exactly the right thing to merit an excellent grade for this week's assignment. Well done! I'm glad you were able to find stuff to add to your page and that you dind't have to revert back to the RTTP page. I am very proud of you: such great work! =) Alfgarciamora (talk) 17:05, 20 March 2017 (UTC)