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Hey Ezeke, I thought the draft in which you wrote was full of some really good information that was nice to read about as far as the history of basketball goes. The portions where you give the exact dates in which each event happened was great to include due to it giving me a better understanding of the history as far as basketball goes that much more. I thought you did really well in keeping the length of your piece at a good amount nicely as well. This allowed me to have little to no confusion as far as what was going on in your article so I thank you for that. This being said, I have just a few things that you could maybe tweak to make the draft that much better :

Lead- The lead was was full of really good info which made me feel enriched as far as what I had learned , yet I feel it could be a bit shorter. The lead should lead us more in the direction of what you are going to talk about as opposed to right of the bat talking about content from the topic. Try just giving us a simple understanding of what it is your going to speak of as opposed to a lot of info that should be in the main body instead.

Structure- The structure of your piece was great in almost every aspect due to the format you put it in and the amount of info in each portion that you put all around. The only suggestion as said earlier would be to structure your lead a bit shorter when compared to the main body portions you entail so we as readers can decipher what is your lead, and what is your main body.

Balance- The balance you show as far as the information you give is of the best magnitude I think and for this reason doesn't need much tweaking. Great job.

Neutral stance - I thought that your stance on the subject was great due to it not showing as if you favored one side or the other. The topic you chose granted seems a bit hard to be biased and is in your case a great reason for you choosing it. Good job.

Reliable Sources - The sources in which you entail are well formatted and seem to be in abundance. I thought it was nice to see that you used multiple sources as opposed to just one as well. All around, great job with that.

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