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Good observation about how a Wikipedia article should differ from the kinds of discussions we have in class. Jmmcabee (talk) 01:35, 18 April 2017 (UTC) jmmcabee

Comments on Ideas Draft

Looks like you found some good references for some potential changes on those articles. However, you also need to evaluate each article like you did for the botany and plant physiology articles. Consider the potential impact and audience for each article. Seems like dimorphic root may not be a high priority article. Who would be searching it? Jmmcabee (talk) 17:53, 26 April 2017 (UTC)jmmcabee

Nice evaluation of vascular cambium article. Looks like it needs quite a bit of editing in addition to adding information. The "too technical" comment is one you'll need to keep in mind as you add to and modify the article. Jmmcabee (talk) 22:01, 28 April 2017 (UTC)jmmcabee

Comments on Article Revision

Looks like a great addition to the vascular cambium article. You should check for grammar. Some things may be unnecessary like mentioning the other roles of the hormones. But it may be useful to give another specific example of how a hormone affects the development of the cambium like you did at the end. You should also check to see if fascicular cambium is defined somewhere else in the article. Jmmcabee (talk) 19:38, 10 May 2017 (UTC)jmmcabee

peer review??

Hellow, friend.

First of all, WOW what a detailed paragraph. It'll be a great addition to the vascular cambium page which is super lacking at the moment. The paragraph seems a little bit too long though? Splitting it into two paragraphs where you begin to talk the other hormones might be nice.

There are a few grammatical? issues throughout the paragraph that could be fixed. A few that I've caught:

• A [study] demonstrated that the mutants are found to have a [reduction] in stem and root growth but the secondary vascular pattern of the [vascular] bundles were not affected with a treatment of cytokinin.
• It has been shown that mutants without auxin[] will [exhibit] increased spacing between the interfascicular cambiums and [] reduced growth of the vascular bundles.
• The mutant plant will therefore[] experience a decreased in water, nutrients, and photosynthates being transported throughout the plant, [eventually leading to death.]
• Gibberellin stimulates the cambial cell division and also regulates differentiation of the xylem tissues, [with no effect on the rate of phloem differentiation. Could probably leave the phloem part out if you wanted to.]
• In poplar trees, high concentrations of gibberellin [is positively correlated to] an increase of cambial cell division and [an] increase of auxin in the cambial stem cells.

(Sorry if it seems like I'm being nitpicky! You've got a really great paragraph going on.)

Currytrain (talk) 04:33, 22 May 2017 (UTC)

Peer Review

You have some really awesome wikipedia worthy information in the whole paragraph! I think adding a bunch of links for the more scientific terms would be an easy way to make your article better. There is certainly some proofreading to do, and I would be happy to do a full paragraph peer proofread if you want! Just let me know, I'm not sure how much time you've spent on that. You might need to switch around some of your paragraph so that it fits in well with the existing article. I think it looks awesome so far! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Chaleb96 (talk • contribs) 05:26, 22 May 2017 (UTC)

Peer Review

Thank you so much for helping out guys! I really appreciate the feedback that you guys have left for me. I will edit it and post the article online. Feel free to edit or expand the article if you are interested! :) — Preceding unsigned comment added by Espressoself (talk • contribs) 23:11, 2 June 2017 (UTC)