User talk:ErysimumLe
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[edit]It looks like you are off to a good start. I would suggest slightly adjusting the first sentence from: Cleopatra the Alchemist, likely alive during the 3rd century, was a female Egyptian, practical alchemist, author, and philosopher. to: Cleopatra the Alchemist was likely alive during the 3rd century, was a female Egyptian, she practiced practical alchemy, was an author, and was a philosopher. This only a suggestion, but it seems to me to flow better and you also get more bits from it :) From the look of it, you will be hard pressed to find any more images, so I'm not even going to go there. You might find something interesting in this Google book: http://books.google.com/books?id=rdI96px90kUC&pg=PA133&dq=Cleopatra+the+Alchemist&hl=en&sa=X&ei=f0SNU6HzJI6MyATm0ILADQ&ved=0CDoQ6AEwAg#v=onepage&q=Cleopatra%20the%20Alchemist&f=false Other than that, I was not seeing a whole lot of available sources in my brief search. Sorry I can't help more, but perhaps that book might help a little. You might also consider creating an "outside links" section near the bottom of the page. The last thing you might consider is having each sections' title the first letter of each word being capitalized. In other words,"Life and places of work" would be "Life and Places of Work." Overall though, you provide good detail on your topic despite the difficulties you have undoubtedly faced on finding sources. The page is also well organized!
You have added 5593 bits and have removed 1068 bits. I don't know how our professor is adding things, but 5593 - 1068 = 4525 bits. Wdjeremy (talk) 20:49, 3 June 2014 (UTC)