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Peer Review

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Hi, Liam here, doing my peer reviewing duties! First off, nice work, especially with the information regarding Dulong's personal life, which was fairly interesting. In my opinion, those sorts of details help to paint someone better as an individual, so your work here was greatly appreciated! In terms of revisions and restructuring, here are my thoughts:

  • For your section on Dulong's life and work, I think it might be best to include subheadings that are indicative of a particular period in Dulong's life. For instance, the paragraphs with regards to Dulong's birth, early life, and education could easily fit under the label of "Early life and education," and the paragraphs dedicated to his death could just as simply be placed under the sub heading "death." This would make your life and work section slightly easier to both navigate as well as increase the ease in which individuals can find relevant information with regards to Dulong's life
  • I think it's fine to call the "Family and Personal Life" just "Personal Life," as family usually gets lumped into this category in wikipedia by convention
  • I would recommend adding a citation for your sentence that "Socially, Dulong was often dismissed as a dry, standoffish individual. His few friends disagreed with this view, viewing his personality as subdued rather than dull." I've added a citation needed label there to further point this out
  • I would also add to the box at the top of the page the fact that Dulong was born in "Rouen, France, and that he died in Paris, France. Minor details, I know, but it looks better in my opinion. Additionally, if you could put a little bit more info inside this box with regards to his family, fields, education, etc., that would be great!

Good work, and good luck to you with your digital museum! Philibenl (talk) 05:59, 6 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Remove categories

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Hi, I removed the categories because the sandbox article was appearing in those categories Vpab15 (talk) 13:58, 11 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]