User talk:Dowusu6654/sandbox
Hi Danielle, I know you have cited your sources, but a lot of this rough draft is not in your own words. You need to overhaul this entire draft because if you publish it as is you will get cited for plagiarism. You also need to fix your citations so that you have authors name, article, journal not file:///C:/Users/Owner/Downloads/2%20(1).pdf. Take out the reference to the jaguar article. You also repeat the same ideas over and over here. Why don't you have a paragraph defining keystone species, their value, and their effect on the ecosystem then transition into a paragraph of one really great example of a keystone species from a study. You also need to bulk up your sources. When I put these clips into google I see you have only used websites. Do these websites show their sources? Are those sources from scientific journals or textbooks? Put keystone species into google scholar instead and pick out an article that you like. Remember that if you use information from that study you have to cite the original publisher of that information not just the study you are reading. You can also cite our textbook on this subject. Good luck on your project! Melmacd94 (talk) 21:27, 15 November 2016 (UTC)
Hi Danielle,
I will advice you start your article with a topic and a clearly defined lead section to guide your readers. In addition, you may also want to break down your main ideas into paragraphs for easy comprehension and simplicity of the material. You are onto a good start though. Good job
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[edit]Danielle, you have some interesting examples and good information in your article addition draft, but it seems you have switched topics from the topic you signed up for (Environmental Behavior) to a different topic (Keystone Species), a topic for which there already is an excellent Wikipedia article. The quality of the current Keystone Species article on Wikipedia will make it difficult for you to add new information to that article. Please decide if it makes the most sense to a) recover your draft on Environmental Behavior, and work off that, or b) think about what you will specifically add to the Keystone article in a way that will add to what is currently there, then state where you will add that information.
In terms of what you have here on keystone species, I do like your examples. Are these different from the examples currently in the Keystone article? If so, these could be good additions to the article, in a more fully fleshed out form. The deer example is especially interesting since it impacts forests right here in MD. Rhirshorn (talk) 18:37, 20 November 2016 (UTC)