User talk:Dowliad/sandbox

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@Dowliad: Looks like you're off to a good start! I made a number of changes to the draft of the article. Most of the changes I made were stylistic but you should check out the history. At least some of the stuff (like the references) are changes you can make to polish stuff a bit. So, more like what I did, I think!

More citations or references for claims that are not primary sources would probably be good. An infobox (perhaps cut-and-pasted from a similar article) would be nice. A picture. I noticed that those things already exist on the Bridge of glass Wikipedia article so I would copy all those things over, plus things like categories and stuff, into the sandbox article so that it looks really ready to go. If you were to paste this over, it would lose some of the good stuff the existing article has.

Also, I see that you have replaced the citation to the Smithsonian in the original article (which was too a public website) with one that is from ProQuest which only people at UW can access. It will always be preferable to include references to public version of citations if they exist and only use the references to the proprietary databases if no public link exists.

These are pretty small things. Tone and such reads well. Good luck! —mako๛ 21:04, 18 October 2016 (UTC)