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If I pinged you here, then you were a FAC nominator for one or more articles that appear in the table below, and I'm asking your opinion of the specific change (see the linked diff) that was made back when a blurb was written for this article for its Main Page appearance at Today's Featured Article (TFA). If you don't have a problem with the diff, then I'll post it on the user page here, but I'll remove it if you change your mind, at any time, for any reason. I won't be moving this out of my user-space ... it's mainly for my personal use, particularly when I have to come up with quick answers at WP:ERRORS ... but if other people want to do more with this, that's fine. I believe these diffs are in line with the general philosophy of article reviewers, but I need your feedback to clarify some things.

First batch

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2016/4/2:

[Serpin proteins] are notable for their unusual mechanism of action, in which they
Their unusual mechanism of action [is]
accumulation of the polymers, causing cell death and organ failure
accumulation of the polymers, which can cause cell death and even organ failure

2016/6/1:

[she] was the subject of a scandal when nude photographs [appeared]
scandalous nude photographs [appeared]

2016/6/6:

On D-Day, ... [they] were to assault
... [they] assaulted
Was not active when this article made TFA. Looking at it now, I might have used "were to" to indicate a sense of a plan that didn't work out, which I think is valid, but don't object, and would not object if this change were made to the article itself, which still says "were to", now. Factotem (talk) 22:21, 8 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks, I'll leave a note on the article talk page and come back to that after we're finished here. - Dank (push to talk) 12:37, 9 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

2016/6/9:

She [did stuff] ... following which she made her acting debut
... and made her acting debut

2016/6/15:

It is commonly known as ... although it shares this latter name
... a name it shares

2016/6/19:

become involved in the investigation
join the investigation

2016/7/5:

with the main idea revolving around flight
with flight as a main theme

2017/8/15:

[She] subsequently won a BAFTA
She won a BAFTA

2017/11/1:

The concept for the game's use of spherical platforms was first conceptualised from ideas used in Super Mario 128
The spherical platforms used in the game first appeared in Super Mario 128
Thanks for the ping. I was happy with the suggestions that you made. I think in both cases, they made the article clearer and more succinct. T.Shafee(Evo&Evo)talk 04:00, 9 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Good to hear it, and I'll be happy to help with more biochem articles. - Dank (push to talk) 04:30, 9 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Feedback so far

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The feedback I'm getting so far is that the transparency is appreciated, but this plan of discussing individual diffs could conceivably cause embarrassment in the long run, so it might not work. What I'm doing now is looking at all the diffs I have and trying to come up with a summary of my conclusions, which I'll post at TFA. - Dank (push to talk) 15:56, 19 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Sorry, I'm overcommitted and I need to put this on hold for now. - Dank (push to talk) 22:46, 6 March 2018 (UTC)[reply]