Jump to content

User talk:Chris hatley/sandbox

Page contents not supported in other languages.
From Wikipedia, the free encyclopedia

--Peer Review 1-- I think the introduction has done a good job of providing an overview to the article in a way that is easy to understand. Though it does have some grammatical errors i.e. "dispite". The final sentence also is a bit convoluted in structure and is lacking a comma: "that, as long as capitalism continues, there is...". It may benefit from a simpler structure. Overall, it may also be useful to include some specific examples of a major aspect of life which the carbon rift has adverse effects on. The second sentence may benefit from being a bit more formal, and perhaps become stronger by removing the word "basically". Pj2.71828 (talk) 01:04, 22 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]