User talk:Chenny1/draft

Hello. I really liked your section on immortality for Sun Wukong! Your source seems to be perfect and I feel that this could be good insight for the Sun Wukong page. However, there are a couple of things that I want to mention to make this perfect. - I was confused at first about how and why Sun Wukong has several stories of turning immortal. I would put a short description in the beginning after the header explaining where this part of the storyline is just to give the reader a reminder for people like me that barely remember/ don't know the storyline! - It also would be good to mention a little more of about the stories especially the last two instead of just explaining how he got it and that it makes them immortal, I think you can add more detail from your text! - There were minor grammar adjustments like capitalizing King in book of mortals.

All in all, good job! Tnrud23 (talk) 09:03, 15 April 2019 (UTC)

Tnrud23 thanks for your helpful review, this is good advice for the author to follow! Chenny1 in addition to the suggestion by your peer reviewer (which you should certainly incorporate), I think your next step is to go beyond just re-telling the myth in the Wikipedia page, but including information about how/why these stories of immortality are important to the myth and its later reception. I think you did a great job finding an area that needed improvement on Sun Wukong's page, and taking information directly from the original text was very smart, since I didn't see it included already on the main page. Keep working hard on this and formatting your text (hyperlinks, etc.) and adding more sources. Great work so far! Gardneca (talk) 23:40, 21 April 2019 (UTC)