User talk:Cat2120330347/Environmental health
PJHC 394 Peer Review
[edit]Hey Catherine! I think you have done a wonderful job of expanding your article in your sandbox. I really believe the Concerns section needed more detail and I am glad that you have done that intently and to a great standard. In terms of improvement, I would suggest looking at the section titles as well as the necessity of the information under each section (in the actual article). I think that would be an important adjustment. Also, there are a few areas in which complicated vocabulary and peculiar phrases are used. I think this will help the overall structure and readability of your article. Everything else is great. I especially am amazed by your efforts in editing other articles to discuss yours. EEmenike (talk) 18:30, 19 March 2023 (UTC)