User talk:Bythefire/sandbox

Hi Tom,

I read over your page. I'm not sure if your Reference section has enough info. To be safe I included the same info I would have included if I was writing in MLA or APA, with a link to the website. You can look at mine to see what I mean. You can get goals, board members, and membership info from their site, and include links to some notable members. The board members can go under organization. The History section is no in paragraph form but I'm not sure if that is on purpose because it is just an outline.

The link for Jared Bell links to Drake Bell, the child from Jerry Maguire. Also, in the last couple of sentences, you should change US to U.S. just to be consistent with the rest of the article, and put a comma after "In 1925," and after "(OAAA)."

You need a reference at the end of your History section.

Hope this is helpful or at least not annoying, Bryanw3 (talk) 02:59, 11 October 2011 (UTC)