User talk:Bruc5373/sandbox
Hi Hayden!
I have no idea if I am posting this in a way that you can see it but here are my peer reviews!
I think that the begininning is a little awkward but when you get down into the nitty gritty it makes complete sense!!! So I would just say to clean up the beginning a bit and reword some of the sentences. Here are some suggestions:
You wrote: One of these animals being the canine and the noise exposure levels they experience when being in kennels My suggestion: An example of this would be in canines and the noise exposure levels occurring within kennels
You wrote: These health risks include both damage to the ear as well as behavioral changes. My suggestion: Health risks dogs are exposed to include ear damage and behavioral changes.
You wrote: The anatomical structures of the ear between the human and canine are very similar, so it is thought that these levels will also negatively impact the hearing of canines in these kennels My suggestion: The anatomical structures of the human and canine ear are very similar, so it is thought that these levels will negatively impact the hearing of canines in kennels.
But after the paragraph of my last suggestion it sounds great!
You da bomb - EK out
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