User talk:Bridginator/sandbox

Prof Garcia's Comments

Week 2

Bridgette, you've done an INCREDIBLE job for this week's assignment. What great and thought-provoking answers on your sandbox! Thank you for taking the time to write out such great responses. And your work on Promession was definitely helpful to that article's page. I had never heard of that topic before - super cool. Keep up the great work and you will do well this semester! Alfgarciamora (talk) 19:57, 30 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@Alfgarciamora: Thank you for your feedback! Bridginator (talk) 14:22, 31 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@Bridginator: Hey Bridgette! I'm sure youre very busy this weekend but I'm still waiting for your article draft so I can peer review it. Can't wait to read it! Nmateo1997 (talk) 20:48, 26 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@Nmateo1997: Hey, Natalie! Sorry for taking so long. My draft is now up.

Peer Review

@Bridginator: Your character certainly sounds very interesting! I'm not sure if you already had this in mind but I would recommend hyperlinking the wiki article to the Council of Five Hundred and any other important people or organizations mentioned in the article. Also, some of your sentences sound a little lengthy and a little confusing. Specifically, "The men who helped Barére escape prison were his cousin, Hector Barére, and a young man whom Barére refused to reveal in fear that he would be executed." I would also expand upon why the men in the Council of Five Hundred "denied" Barére if the article does not already explain that. Nmateo1997 (talk) 01:47, 27 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@Nmateo1997: Thank you for your feedback, Natalie! Hyperlinking the Council of Five Hundred article is a great suggestion. Also, you are definitely right about some of my sentences being too lengthy. I will alter them and make them reader-friendly. I will be implementing all of your suggestions, with the exception of providing information as to why the Council of Five Hundred denied Barére. After copious research, I cannot find that missing piece of information. Nonetheless, it was a great suggestion. It is sadly out of my reach.