User talk:BARONBOGLE97/sandbox

Peer Review

The article is very short right now, but has a very good premise to write on. There are a few things that need critiquing though. The first sentence is very unusual to try and read and your sources are very old. Another critique is on your sources, you need to change the source date retrieved from what you have currently to a more MLA format. Example: 8 September, 2016. Overall your article has some serious potential but you need to get to work on it. You only have two more weeks to finish it. Egarcia36 (talk) 16:16, 22 November 2016 (UTC)