User talk:Aut hampton/sandbox

Peer Review by Keren Fernandez

Very good improvements on this articles and overall good job! You have a clear structure on where each sentence is going to go. You have a balanced coverage because you add what is needed to the article in order to balance out the information. Very neutral content, you don't give signs of going to one side. You have reliable sources but, I couldn't quite get into one of your sources though, it's titled "Discrimination and Modern Paganism: A Study of Religion and Contemporary Social Climate by Elizabeth Hoadley", if you can find the link to this article (even an abstract) that would be awesome! My suggestions are to add more to your article, maybe paraphrasing a citation for example (You're doing great so far by the way) and just in general add more information to each section. Kerenefernandez (talk) 19:33, 19 October 2018 (UTC)

Thank you for your advice! Aut hampton (talk) 01:27, 27 October 2018 (UTC)

Jessica Nguyen

Overall, great introduction in the topic you chose and what you will be focusing on for this part of the assignment. After looking at your sandbox, it was very simple and very short. I also did take a look at the article you chose and briefly looked at it. It was relatively long and had enough information. For the discrimination heading, great job on finding an additional information for the article you chose. Also, I like how you specifically put in parenthesis on where the addition of information is going to be at. There were a few mistakes you made and needs to be changed. One of your references/sources you had, did not have a link. If this is an abstract from a scholarly source, maybe try to find the citation source they provide so viewers are able to click on the link for access on the article. Your information was overall good, maybe try to add more information about your topic that can give more support. Jessicahnguyen 29 (talk) 19:34, 19 October 2018 (UTC)

Thank you for your advice! Aut hampton (talk) 01:27, 27 October 2018 (UTC)