User talk:Ashleyickes/sandbox

In the section concerning visual orienting and attention, I am concerned with the lack of citations regarding from where the definitions for visual orienting, foveation, exogenous orienting, and endogenous orienting came. Also I find some of the experimental evidence of consciously locating an object in a sea of stimuli in the opening paragraph to be very vague and unreliable in its description. Were these experiments preformed by somebody? However, I do believe that the article is factual, unbiased, and relevant in origin, despite the lack of citations, vagueness, and poor explanations throughout the article throughout the article. Ashleyickes (talk) 15:26, 1 September 2016 (UTC)

Visual orienting refers to the movement associated with one focusing his attention on a signal in his visual field.

Exogenous Orienting occurs when a sudden disruption occurs in the periphery causing a automatic and involuntary orientation towards the changing stimuli as documented (Jonides, 1981; Rafal & Henik)

Endogenous Orienting is movement to focus on a stimulus that occurs voluntarily when one is directed by a goal driven stimulus. (Jonides, 1981)

Some quick general feedback I would give your draft:

Clearly you know a lot about the topic, and I really appreciate that you have a wide range of sources. However, I think that often times in the Wikipedia sections you focus too much on the methods. I already think it is a little bit wordy, and so maybe cutting down in this area would help you out with that. Focus more on the conclusions of the studies rather than the methods. There is a lot of good information here, I think you just need to work on summarizing the information in a more concise way that will be more manageable for the reader. Vewalke (talk) 19:35, 30 September 2016 (UTC)