User talk:Ashley3840J/Solon Police Department

Kirsten3840J (talk) 16:31, 1 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

The article was clear very clear, but I believe it could've used more facts. The style and grammar were correctly used. As for following the Wikipedia manual of style the abbreviations were placed in the correct spots. The citing was done correctly, which makes me believe that the trustworthiness of this article is liable. The organization was fine for the most part, but you may want to place a couple of the titles in better chronological order.

Clarity of the wiki was excellent. The headings were great and there was just enough information in each heading to get a feel for what the SPD was really about. I liked how there were multiple headings, i felt like a lot was covered! Style was great, the paragraph links were good, the side with the information box with the pictures to follow was a great visual. Also the table of contents was nice so that i could search specifically. The first paragraph however under history i would maybe split up just because it is a lot of information and it is just grouped all in one, that was the only heading i would have liked to see split in two. The grammar was good, all the right punctuation was there, i did not see any run ons, very easy to follow. Definitely accurate and trustworthy, with the sources labeled at the bottom and the facts given along with the history was great! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Cab3840J (talk • contribs) 16:46, 1 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Werner3840J (talk) 16:50, 1 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Introduction: Bold "Solon Police Department". Also, include where Solon is. Some grammatical mistakes, such as:

"The station has several services that are broken into 8 different departments. Each handle responsibilities that are different than the other departments". Introduction was clear, however. As a reader, I understand what the article will entail.

History: I love all of the facts you provided, but it is not very organized, and the sentences appeared "choppy". Maybe included paragraph breaks, seperating information between time periods, people, etc.? Citations?

Departments and Organization: Great information, but some of the words included, the average reader may not know. Include links to other Wikipedia articles to help inform the reader (for example, "two-fold"). Citations?

The remaining sections offer the same criticism. Finish reference list and citations. Smooth out sentences. Overall, very informative and clear!!! :)

I think you should link "Maple Heights Police Department" & "Cuyahoga County Jail" if they have their own page. In the Personnel section, I was confused with your first sentence ending with "as of late". Overall, I think your article is well written, follows the style and grammar guidelines as well as the manual of style guidelines. Your sources that you got your information from seem very trustworthy and reliable. Jessica3840J (talk) 16:58, 1 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]