User talk:AndrewBrowning/sandbox
Suggested edit to "Genomics" page
I think the intro paragraph could be rearranged in a way that makes it flow a little better. The fourth sentence, "Genomics aims at the collective characterization and quantification of genes, which direct the production of proteins with the assistance of enzymes and messenger molecules," goes into detail about proteins kind of prematurely, which leads to the fourth and fifth sentence and less pertinent info on proteins and mutations. I suggest removing the material on proteins and mutations and making the sixth sentence ("In contrast to genetics...") the fourth sentence. This would keep the focus on what genomics is, the big picture. AndrewBrowning (talk) 22:09, 10 April 2017 (UTC)
Recombinant DNA
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In the first sentence of this page, recombinant DNA is abbreviated by "rDNA." I suggest either differentiating between recombinant DNA and ribosomal DNA, which are both abbreviated by rDNA, or removing the abbreviation altogether to avoid confusion. AndrewBrowning (talk) 22:20, 10 April 2017 (UTC) — Preceding unsigned comment added by AndrewBrowning (talk • contribs)
Comment on Jackierodz518's post:
I agree with Jackierodz518 that the second paragraph is in need of clarification. I would reword the second sentence to say something along the lines of "Recombinant DNA is the general name...by the combination of DNA material in the form of a template strand from one source and a vector from a different source." This helps specify what is needed specifically for recombinant DNA to be made. AndrewBrowning (talk) 03:25, 12 April 2017 (UTC) — Preceding unsigned comment added by AndrewBrowning (talk • contribs)
Suggested Edit
The second paragraph of the "Uses" section begins with the following sentence: "The most common application of recombinant DNA is in basic research, in which the technology is important to most current work in the biological and biomedical sciences." I suggest changing "The most common..." to "An additional..." or something of that nature because the first paragraph of the section describes commercial and medical purposes as a wide use. Also, removing the word "basic," as it implies that the work being done in this field is simplistic, may improve the text. I suggest removing the latter part of the sentence starting with "...in which the..." and replacing it with the second sentence of the paragraph to follow up the introduction of research at the beginning of the sentence. Combining all of these suggestions may produce something like: "An additional application of recombinant DNA is in modern research, in which it is used to identify, map, sequence, and determine the function of genes."AndrewBrowning (talk) 23:13, 17 April 2017 (UTC) — Preceding unsigned comment added by AndrewBrowning (talk • contribs)
Comment on Abbystewart's post:
This would be helpful. Saying that "...DNA molecules from all organisms share the same chemical structure..." sounds a little too broad and doesn't address B-DNA or rhinoviruses. AndrewBrowning (talk) 23:31, 17 April 2017 (UTC) — Preceding unsigned comment added by AndrewBrowning (talk • contribs)